timeless - nice core idea with the concretization of introspection and choice, I feel the execution was somewhat if not sloppy, then at least uninspired in terms of making it a cohesive experience (as in while the entirety (the piece) is greater than the sum of the parts (individual lines), the parts need some polish).
Split Eight - you are a master of atmosphere, sir, as well as connecting sentiments to actions, seemlessly, with your carefully worded lines. You could basically apply that writing aesthetic to any topic and make it eerie and intriguing.
I vote Split Eight due to strong, yet subtle, characterization
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