Vulgar: The giant dustbunny button. It’s like the world is in a bubble and this guy is the maintenance man for the ozone/atmosphere pollutants. I dug the concept a lot. Wording was interesting; at points the piece felt like it was stumbling over its own feet because of how much it seemed to get ahead of itself. The word “jargon” in the title threw me off a little..made me expect something else. Strong verse overall though.
Oats: Fucking genius. I love verses like this. To be fair I love verses like vulgar’s too. This is BOTW for me. I don’t think I’ve been this excited by the time I was voting. Your verse took a subject and tore it apart while maintaining integrity and mechanics. The verse didn’t put your viewpoints on a soap box, but it effectively projected your view points and left the reader with a thought provoked/introspective feeling.
Vote:Oats. BOTW.
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