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Old 05-11-2014, 04:12 PM   #5
Perpendicular
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Timeless: Deaths spokesman…I dug the concept behind that line. There were several wording issues throughout that bothered me. Nothing that was overbearing in contrast to the storyline, but was mentionable. The story itself didn’t hold my interest and I think (once again) it was mostly due to the wording. The concept, especially the end, was strong.
Split: Mirage et Trios is a dope title. Multi-layered, multi-faceted depiction of the character. Precise wording (again, from last week) and encapsulating descriptions. The ending was a little abrupt but borderline poetic justice. Characterization obviously your strong suit.
vote: Split
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