Certain, I liked the intent behind the schemes (internal rhyming and whathaveyou) and while the quality of the execution was solid overall, it sometimes dipped to forced. The plot vaguely reminded me of The Island, but with an android instead of clones, accounting for drive and turning 'humanity' on its head.
Vividlyvague, this was very playful and carried the same absurdly disjointed, psychotically jaunty tone as the propaganda ads in Starship Troopers. The writing was a bit wordy and straggling, but it kind of fit the format here and added rather than subtracting from the experience.
I give my vote to Vividlyvague based on focus and a, within the parameters of the narrative, stronger authenticity
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