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Old 05-10-2014, 06:44 PM   #5
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Overall i liked it alot, a few lines stood out, being very well written.

that laid dormant for years, keeping completely silent,
till provoked by those opposed to seeking guidance,

listen by my own admission we are pitifully spineless,
as the jellyfish in polluted water, swimming in silence,
we rape the earth, then cook the harvest on a kitchen appliance

as acid rain washed all our dreams onto the ground* -makes me think brainwash, awesome line

we extract and replace with waste, in landfills and dumps, -this line was nice
then act surprised getting hit with superstorms like every two months, -this line didn't follow up the expectations laid by the previous line, for me
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