[Mike Wrecka]

weird battle. both verses obviously had a lot of work put into them. but I didn't particularly enjoy either of them. I did however appreciate the craft put forth


zygote - im going to be blunt. I think you are doing too many historical pieces this season. its getting redundant to me. I started the verse and was like "uggghhhh another history lesson text book rap from zyg" lol. I was willing to look past the deja vu feeling but the writing itself was mechanically kind of simplistic. you really were only rhyming the end words. it needed some inners. or something. the flow was very basic imo. the story itself was interesting enough. it was Game of Thrones meets How to Train Your Dragon. which is cool. but really it was just a piece on Viking politics. it was different at least.

I don't really see the connection with the topic unfortunately.


zombie - you abandoned your paragraph format and I think it hurt you here. the flow was choppy in parts. and seemed forced in others. the first section was kind of a mess mechanically tbh. and after reading the second section I was underwhelmed as a reader. sometimes it seems, to me at least that you throw together words and phrases that on the surface look like they could have some deeper meaning but upon further examination really are just jibberish

Am I even real? Is there even a heaven, a highness?
the venture of blind men, that attempt to go spineless

what does that mean? blind men that attempt to go spineless? it means nothing. it just worked out as an end rhyme. its easy to write like that


BUT


after that line, you really really picked it up.


i'm inception, a rhythm of lines, a measure in metrics presented in time
an iridescent surprise that plays a role in a vengeful surmise
a minuscule peasant. I dont even exist. Nor alive
a totem to wake you up. an ineffectual likeness
this is now a speck full of whiteness, on the inflections of light in your iris
a descent of the righteous, or conceptual physics through a concept of psychics
I'm nothing, I'm no one. I'm nothing that has never existed. Forever. It's pious
and I sit with a luger aimed, to the brain, dosage of psilocybin
who can say, to the truth explained, that they've ever before seen anything like it?



this section worked very well. I think this is what you were aiming for the whole verse but didn't hit your stride until the end. that section that I italicized is very impressive. and one could have a field day really digging into those lines and phrases and interpreting them. it won you the battle imo


overall- kind of disappointing for a champ match tbh. but still better than most. good battle fellas. im going with zombie for the higher difficulty level of his writing.


vote - zombie