Zyg, as usual this is strong storytelling. Great imagery displayed throughout. You somehow always remind me of Ras Kass in his ‘Nature of the Threat’ mode, writing wise. Flow was spontaneous, usually forced in the ends of lines. Couple things though, felt that your approach to the topic wasn’t really there, the Jomsvikings never before seen a rise/fall in a king of their country? If that’s all then that’s pretty bland, I couldn’t find any other relation you could’ve had. The ending line was good I enjoyed the twist in humor. Felt I was left wanting more from it, like something was supposed to happen but didn’t. Not bad though.
Zombie, the Annie Oakley reference was dope, being as I was just reading about her last night lol. Same with your opponent this week, I felt you both were lacking a certain moment in your piece to really open it up and make me say ‘wow’. The writing was dope though, the endorphins and knock-knock bar was probably the best. Sticking the topic on the end was a bit redundant. One of the best suicidal raps I’ve read in awhile.
Hard vote, both approaches were a reach to the topic. I felt Zombie had the better written and more complete read, so he’s got my vote for that. This could go either way, great champ match fight.
v. Zombie
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