[Adonis]

I enjoyed both of these verses for different reasons. While one was 1/8 the length of the other, the depth was about the same, or if anything the shorter of the two had more depth. The story was cool, but as always with vivid, length over content. There were alsoplentyof errors as such... A shame, made it feel as if you wrote and posted and thought, "His is a throw away and I'll win". Might backfire. Jon had a very interesting idea, while the execution and flow were top notch, the length was merely a haiku. All in all a very dope read though none the less.

Overall this is a rather tough vote. I didn't particularly like the ending of vivid's verse with the CODE and all, but it was decent enough writing. On the other hand, a short handed Jon wrote with depth in a small scale sampling which obviously I appreciate as I try and do the same, saying more with less. Tough vote.

V/Vivid.

I liked Jon's more, but in the end it is the length that got him the win. The errors nearly fucked you, you win by a cunt hair in my vote. Clean it up some