John Mercy - This was generally good, a droplet of the topic that I might've liked to see formulate into a pool. The representative use of each word as a character from a versatile background was interesting but inconclusive. We're told, but not shown. A thorough example might be OneBeLo's verse on his track Evil of Self. I like your writing but I also enjoy a full plate.
VV - The veracity of the action reminded me of an Ice Cube crime movie in fast forward.. I felt like going more John Grisham with this would've benefited you wholesomely. I somewhat followed and I somewhat didn't. There was high volume event horizons, demanding better info about who this cop actually is and what his motives are. This was forgettable, but daring.
Vote VV.
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