Timeless. Intriguing, lost me at the last stanza. Some weird aspects. Obama pulling a gun. Significance of three sections of world. What separate heavens means. No conclusion.
Adonis. Kind of wrote a flex. More of a meta self-referential verse about yourself in comparison to other writers. Some great scattered thoughts, but no real overall goal.
Couldn't really justify saying one verse was better than the other...two indirect takes on the topic. I enjoyed Adonis's use of language more, but at the same time Timeless had a developed effort at a story that slightly missed, where Adonis wrote on topic but in a simple way.
I feel like Timeless deserves this win.
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