hmmm very interesting battle here. you guys took things into uncharted territory with your verses. both were risky endeavors to say the least but in the end it turned out to be entertaining and a refreshing change of pace.
zygote - creative take on the topic. I am usually vehemently against attacking your opponent in a topical battle but you did it in a comical and novel way. it also wasnt really a diss so to speak, more a satire using a character that was supposed to represent cake. the writing was good. the flow was ok not great. and tbph, which I know you appreciate, I got bored of the verse half way through. it was yawnsville in some spots. but im not big on political satire. overall good idea, decently executed.
pancake - ok so after reading zygs verse I said, ok pancake has to do something a little out of the ordinary to top that. and you did. except you didn't come up with your own idea, you just mirrored zygs. I thought that created a very interesting kind of battle. one we haven't seen before. so no minus points for that. but I think you missed an opportunity to come up with a zany idea of your own. the writing was better than zygs. flow and structure wise. the end rhymes were also better. the marionette line stands out. I like that word. BUT and this is a big sir mix a lot but, this felt like a half effort from you. it was too short. I don't know I don't think you gave it 100 percent here.
overall - zyg had the better idea, cause he created it. pancake had the better writing but lacked the length and depth of zyg. im going zygote
vote - zygger
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