Write/Wright- that verse was fucking tight. I like how the "kids, the moral of the story is..." part at the end didn't sound cheesy. Your story was tight knit and the mechanics worked for it. Great story with great detail. Good job.
Zombie- this was an interesting piece. I think, though some parts were good as is, this felt very drawn out and unnecessary. The commentary on perception was interesting even though it felt like some kind of subliminal swaying. Overall not very enjoyable due to the boring bravado inserts and breaks in the verse with the dates. This felt undercooked and overcooked at the same. Which is wierd. Ok verse, but thanks for showing.
MVGT Justice Wright for a more concise, and enjoyable piece. Thanks for showing guys.
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