I agree with what black was saying about the first half of this piece compared to the second. Although I certainly enjoyed the rhyming, I feel like you really hit your strive here
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the crawling geometry - oh so beautiful, reticent
a checkered cage of silhouettes confusing our essences
muting the messages, but your body language spoke to me
delicate whispers of your curvaceous coquetry
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Had more to do with my own comprehension really. The beauty of the images and smooth flow make for a great read even if I can't fully appreciate what you're attempting to get across. But who's to say that's not art in itself.