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Old 05-03-2014, 11:06 AM   #5
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That way of writing separating the statement with the explanation by dashes was interesting. It was stylistically distinct. Also interesting in that there weren’t many ‘little words’ things like “the” “and” “of” “are” all these words that are used commonly in normal writing were minimized. It gave the writing a cool kind of feel. E.g., “Western Medicine Theory - indoctrinate the masses.
Fear driven Malpractice; Profits through the traffic.” Perhaps many voters might dislike lines like “Polar Ice Caps Melting; Evapotranspiration
perpetuated through human overpopulation.” it seems kind of jargon-heavy but it also seems like that was your objective. If there’s any major criticism it’s that, in comparison, your overall theme wasn’t that clear.
Very humorous and topical writing considering the recent basket ball controversy as a homage. Some of the jokes were a bit off putting, but I must admit to laughing at the da lench mob reference. I think you demonstrated the absurdity of racism well with jokes like that. Also juxtaposing the extreme wealth with the extreme kinky habits made for a good comment. Voting for Certain.
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