Woah. This was awesome
Split, a very very descriptive narration of what seems to me is a man obsessing over a girl but he's too afraid to act of the feelings? At least thats what I got from it. The wording choice in this is what was a stand out for me, very refined and sophisticated if you will. I enjoyed this piece quite a bit actually.
Vulgar, i really like the fact that you made this a little more reader friendly as far as content, wording, and references. Sometimes I have no idea what you are talking about and it just makes me not want to read it but this was just a great reader friendly story. Still technically sound but I fould more enjoyment out of it because it left me satisfied after reading it, my only gripe is that I wish it was a little longer.
This was a really hard decision. Both of you know what you're doing and kill it in your own styles so honestly i'm going to pick a winner solely on which one I enjoyed MORE and thats vulgar.
Mvgt=Vulgar
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