Timeless: Forced rhymes. That’s my first impression of you. Extraneous details to your story were also boring. I also didn’t appreciate your characterization. What kind of man prepared to split the world and claim world war overtake would crumble because his wife and kids were taken? Just doesn’t seem like that’s how it would go, to me. Strong closer, though.
Adonis: Where’s my shoutout? That was a cool take on the topic. Definitely original, and refreshingly braggadocio. Whos to say it can’t work? Playful banter, good pacing. I liked the verse man.
Vote:Adonis
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