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Old 05-02-2014, 01:46 PM   #5
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Lol, this was an entertaining battle

Timeless, you went for a more political approach which was pretty on point until where putin kidnapped his family, while I appreciate the humor in the next few lines I felt the word usage was a little elementary compared to the rest of your piece, I just feel like those 4-6 lines stuck out like an eye sore. I think you could have reworded that area to make it still humorous but still keep the same caliber vernacular. As for the piece itself it was very well written, conceptionally and mechanically. You did your thing


Adonis, you chose the more brag route which if done right can be awesome and this was pretty good, I wish you wouldn't have used the @ symbols to tag everyone, I mean regardless of what you think of your superiority over all human life most of us are pretty smart and would have caught it lol. I thought this was the most direct and to the topic piece you've written and that makes me happy. It was more clear than your recent pieces which makes it easier for the reader.


This is actually a very close battle because you both wrote very polished pieces and this could really go either way. This time im going to have to go with timeless though because I think he was more creative in his approach to the topic.

Mvgt=timeless
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