Interesting battle.
Mechanically equal, in a strange way. JM's saving grace was his incredibly tight, unyielding schemes. Everything fit perfectly. Perfectly. I realize having written for awhile that perfect is attainable in context, so I'm comfortable saying that. Your character tracks two or three shades of pain, and point out that living in pain is not a response to stimuli but is an evolution of it. Harrowing.
Zombie is an incredibly rhymer. This was like, Open Mic topical defined. That is good and bad, because you did address the topic well, you added lots of little insights rather than conveying a story, and in the context of pain/ BDSM it is a bit different than say love/ a romance because of the categorical scattering of complexities is a lot broader in the second even though the relationship is the same. Wow i sound like a shithead. sorry negative three minutes to vote. I thought the verse was dope
I would give it JM because I think he was not outclassed or dwarfed by Zombie's monstrous effort and he executed his entire verse with admirable finesse while Zombie had finesse applied in a blunt force trauma manner
JM
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