Jonathan- oh my. Yo can I even really mention your diction, your wording, your flow? I mean honestly, in all of that, lies no problem at all. You had no problem giving the reader images and description but where I feel you came up a bit short was in your lack of an actual place or setting. I feel you where describing vividly this characters feelings exact but where was just no other matter in your piece and that’s a bit of a letdown.
Zombie- this was sick! I can’t judge this battle on mechanics at all I swear! Your take on the topic given was nothing unsual but shit did you make it so that, that doesn’t matter at all. Not only was the imagery in this piece alive as fuck but the piece just took on different tempos altogether and it just worked. This was kwayze!
This vote is not based on anything more than enjoyment I must say, along with a hit and a miss. Both these writers are sickening, and this can go either way. I wouldn’t be surprised at all
Mvgt zombie
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