MMLP- I felt like a lot of thios piece didn't rhyme. I also feel like you went above and beyond in scope compared to your first drop. I applaud the effort(including the dialogue). I feel like a lot more could be done here, but I liked the concept and the ambition.
d0ut- The overall execution of this piece was very corny and bland. The only time it was halfway interesting to me was the end where the protagonist killed himself aftere maiming the intruder? I think the concept could have been executed a lot better for what this was.
MVGT MMLP for more interesting concept and approach, although the execution fell short imo.
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