[Split]

pretty incredible battle. Pancake was wordier than usual, which was pretty necessary to his verse and it was done so tastefully. Oats used a preexisting story arc and gave himself the liberty of filling in tangential details and applying a lens to an image us readers have already seen. I don't think anyone is fucking with Oats in the traditional sense of "lyricism" though Pancake's subtle use of literary techniques supplanted the need to compete in this sense. Pancake isn't poetic, vocab-wise, but there is a definitive poetic quality to how his words and sentences are laced together. Oats lacked this in this particular verse, I think it was partially because of the biblical tone/ style of writing. On the final competitive level both gave fascinating explications of the topic. I kind of struggle to put each in to words as of late because I don't like taking a long time to write around roommates/ friends because then I have to explain that I'm writing an email or watching porn or something stupid to keep my secret identity safe... but I think each writer explored a different TYPE of theme, not even, a different breed of conclusion. Like. Pancake's final notes demonstrated a shimmering cascade of profundity within the landscape of his own creation. If you ever played Legend of Zelda: Wind Waker it is when you go into the Temple of Time and that boat faggot tells you that it was frozen 300 years ago or some shit and then everything comes alive while the camera is busy panning and Zeldas flicking her bean to the idea of getting captured again. The implications of the realization are physical and real in one world, which is not real, but at the same time extend to the viewer and say "even though this is not how life is, it is in some microcosmic ways and macrocosmic if you can only open your mind and learn how to look at it." On the contrary, Oats' verse was a semantical revelation, like how you realize that the title Legend of Zelda refers to how each video game is the same story, told by a different culture of people. Thats not as good an analogy as the first. I don't know. OATS CONCLUSION HAD A GREATER IMPACT ON THE GREATER MEANING OF HIS VERSE BUT IT DOESNT NECESSARILY MEAN SO WITHIN THE READER.

I really appreciated the creativity of Oats' verse and angle but just really liked the intri***ies in Pancake's verse. Dead even otherwise.


vote pancake