[Frank]

Adonis

Wrote about deaths gatekeeper steering the boat across the visceral lake. Some soft writing, deli***y to the wording, almost appetizer like. It's the lyrical equivalent of finger food for me. I am never quite satisfied with the dish. It's expensively presented on a white china plate with all the trimmings and splatterings and it looks delicious. It' like 3.5 O.Z of seeweed leaves and poached ostrig egg in snail sauce though. Zagat score: 74.

Dyedinthewool

Feeling your steelo, it's reminiscent of the late great FreshADiddle. Feminine touch, I thought that your wording was unique in its simplicity and naturally unfolded in organic style. Its flow was consistent and never wavered really, even as the syllables slipped and the schemes stopped coming as tight. Story had a creep feel to it. Solid effort.

MVGT Adonis