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Old 04-27-2014, 08:21 PM   #1
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Mm- all over the place bro. This was a tough due to the grammatical errors and our omissions. This in turn fucked with your flow. I didn't enjoy the story either due to the lack of climax and build up. Overall, I can only be honest and say I was not a fan this week.

Doubt - i wasn't the biggest fan of this either. It had pace, which was cool, not the strongest in rhyme either, a decent verse at best. You will get my vote here, but I feel like I would have voted against you against some of the other opponents. Anyways, the eye story was ok. I think you could have gone a but more gruesome, a bit more imagery and overall cut bits out and added more to convey a truer story

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