Vivdly: Coxswain. That show is hilarious. Current/go with the flow line was dope. Verse felt unfinished. The main characters internal battle felt unfulfilled. Had a cool opener but it flamed out before finishing.
Just Write: Strong tie into the topic. Verse was brought full circle, which was nice. It felt a little abrupt/short, but it hit the nail on the head for what you were trying to accomplish. I understand you were trying to use samurai/warrior roots to represent unspoken ideologies but using hard-to-pronounce names is a big taboo for me
Vote: just write
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