Vividlyvague - Was this an unused verse from the 'Storylead' week ("You are awoken by a blinding light outside your window")? Regardless, this, like Vulgar said, seemed unfinished and any relation to the topic is tangential at best. This is weird coming from you because you're one of the most dedicated topicalists in the league. I was expecting another fun, fully fleshed out rhyme fest and I left a little confused. I did laugh at the title. What was there was good. You are one of the best in the league and dialogue. There just wasn't enough here to dissect. A verse as short as this can work if it's fully realized but that's not the case here. Every one has an off-week, I guess. Bring the real VV back brah.
Just Write - Master story teller dials it back and gives us a touching tale about family and honor. Your rhymes were a bit stronger than I remember them being previously, but I could be wrong. I enjoy stories like these. No twists, nothing crazy, confident enough to stand on it's own content without the flash and pizzazz. The opening two lines brought me in and set the scene. I thought your formatting aided you, the periods between sections. If you can dial it in and start upping your complexity in terms of rhyme mechanics and flow while still maintaining your penchant for storytelling you're a real threat.
I thought this would be the most enjoyable battle of the week. Two good storytellers with differing styles clashing over a topic that plays into their strengths. Vividlyvague had his first so-so effort in who know's how long and JW did his thing. Here's to a rematch where both show out.
v/ Just Write
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