Smegma- ok . I really liked how your story started but it lacks any emotion and almost seemed as if you were writing just to write, it was almost bland. I didnt like the way you wrapped it up either. With a few tweaks this could have been a great read because it had a lot of potential. The rhymes were somewhat elementary compared to your opponents which is something i'd say to work on but all in all I did enjoy this and am looking forward to reading more from you.
Mike wrecka- sup bro, lol@running out of breathe stabbing someone. Idk, I feel like you didnt take this piece as serious as previous ones. What I mean to say is it's not as polished as your usual pieces and for the first time I think ever that ive read, you forced a few words. Idk if its cause you wernt inspired or what but I hope you stay in the league. I always enjoy your stuff. Anyways I think you stayed on topic with a direct easy route which is risky but it was effective enough to get the win here
Mvgt=MW
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