Johnathan Mercy - Very solid writing and a pleasure to read. I wasn't feeling the ending bar much, I would've personally ended with the "ingrained in the essence" rhyme and called it a day. This verse seemed to be about a drug addict who is being controlled by his own demons, allowing for biblical references and theology to seep through. The title, the mention of Sodom, massive flames and acid rain, the afterburn(afterlife) and scathing the heavens reinforced this "Lucifer rising" mood cloud. Overall, it was a stellar offering but there wasn't much magnetism drawing me toward it.
Zombie - This verse caused me to look up Stockholm syndrome, and I also just found "Jerusalem Syndrome" lol. LoLed. LOLZ. So yeah, this was a tight verse as well. Tons of highlights. What it was about was self explanatory, masochism and sadism.
going AWOL with box cutters. trademark snip of Glasglow
my lip expands, slow. lemon drips; to add to thee extent the gash coves
golden trim. sounds closed. handcuffed to an open vented black stove
a blatant blip. exact blows, to my face, and hip, and back bones
^The content was sick.
It's hard to argue with visceral detail. Zombie had more momentum going toward his ending, which I thought he executed better. Johnathan had excellent construction but his content was a little less engaging than Zombie's, who I feel hit a stride here and checkmated his opponent.
My vote goes to Zombie.
Great battle.
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