Your rhyming was dope and those changes were pretty seemless and tight. I feel like content wise, it started a little scatterbrained but melded into something more solid on the way thruogh. It felt like a few lines in you realized what you wanted to say and said it more clearly. I also liked the second voice. The other personality kicked into gear and you revved a little. The changed came about like a Jeckle and Hyde kind of sequence. Definitely my cup of tea.Cool piece. I loved the introspective quality, and , even though you got serious in points, the overall body didn't feel especially serious and final. Nice work, Wit.
__________________
Ahem.
|