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Adonis · 04-20-2014, 11:12 PM

DiscLaimer: read each a few times since due date, voting quick though
Oats- i appreciate the knowledge in bars, however, I did not enjoy flow. At all. Too many breaks between. Just as I begin to un-love your verse you slip in a hint of rhyme with strong meaningful ruse. you also have the ability to simply make sense with thought of depth, and often too.. You make sense above your opponent. You developed a style that's appreciated more with each read which is rare and simply put, dope.

Jah. The Verse was dope. Meaning and rhyme. But if I will, honestly,it lacked. The detail was strong when you wanted it to be, but when you filled you fell short. The ending was not needed, I mean the final 2 stanzas.

Voting: I enjoyed both,Def did. Two powerful verses they when read with a careful eye simply made sense. Two good reads thank you.
V/oats
Similar flow but meaning and imagery in each line accumulatedwas just stronger

04-20-2014, 11:12 PM	#8
Adonis Tsk Tsk Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Beer Goggles Posts: 4,834 Battle Record: 36-34 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - NFL Pick'em 2016-17 Rep Power: 9946449	DiscLaimer: read each a few times since due date, voting quick though Oats- i appreciate the knowledge in bars, however, I did not enjoy flow. At all. Too many breaks between. Just as I begin to un-love your verse you slip in a hint of rhyme with strong meaningful ruse. you also have the ability to simply make sense with thought of depth, and often too.. You make sense above your opponent. You developed a style that's appreciated more with each read which is rare and simply put, dope. Jah. The Verse was dope. Meaning and rhyme. But if I will, honestly,it lacked. The detail was strong when you wanted it to be, but when you filled you fell short. The ending was not needed, I mean the final 2 stanzas. Voting: I enjoyed both,Def did. Two powerful verses they when read with a careful eye simply made sense. Two good reads thank you. V/oats Similar flow but meaning and imagery in each line accumulatedwas just stronger __________________ I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is TUPAC SHAKUR Last edited by Adonis; 04-21-2014 at 12:03 AM.