Adonis, very poetical piece my dude. The flow was exceptional
Skies are sails... Ground, the abode.
Waves crash... melodic sounds in a note.
Cast out inhibition, reel in a simple vision.
If a souls required, good or evil, a souls a victim.
Plain as day, no contradiction.
Murky water is conscious wisdom
The line in the sand is...skippers engine.
"ahoy"
Land lovers ironically made of water.
Since the day of The Apple and The Father.
Single cells broke chains and morphed.
Devolved, forever, anchored in the port.
This was my favorite section, the more I read from you the more I realize you're a smart dude, a lot of thought goes into your pieces and that's probable why you're so successful with them.I wish this was a little longer, by the end I was left wanting.
Vivid,
I immediately just fell into the story and all it's glory. This was spectacularly written. It played out like a movie and by the time it was over I wished ther there was more. Besides the mechanics being near perfect the story was entertaining as. Great job
Adonis had a very good piece but went up against a strong vivid who just wrote the fuck out of his verse so he gets my vote this week.
Vote=VV
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