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Old 04-19-2014, 09:31 PM   #10
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"eat your heart out to watch as your appendages rust
feels like i've slept on every train. every bench, every bus" - humorous kind of homeless chic. Also it was nice to use the word carcinogen, it's quite an interesting sort of word. The ending was a good blend of philosophical and personal stuff. The title was a new word, after looking it up Mandala means 'circle' and it is a religious symbol for the universe. Pretty fitting title considering the 'waving' ending, where waving can be common for hello or goodbye, beginnings or endings, big bang or heat death. There is often different layers of meaning to your writing, this time both the surface substance use and loss themes were nice but also the other 'Mandala' aspects as well.
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