[Adonis]

Zombie - I liked the flow or cadence. It read completely linear with few hiccups, in fact I believe the only one being abyss/abyss which I disliked. A story of death and realizationt deep in thought and you explained quite a bit. The entire "current" concept was pretty dope, but that was overshadowed by the detail of death. The floating away where the moon takes you, the way the water flow doesn't judge you, the slow death and the acceptance the character had. Good drop, thoroughly enjoyed. First read I hated it, literally. I didn't understand the flow because I'm not used to that style, but when I sobered I grew to appreciate, thank you for solid read


Mr Brady - this shit was serious but had bits that literally made me laugh, I know you fit the humor in on purpose and I appreciate that. I liked the story for what it was, but I do feel like you were just writing the story, nearly completely void of emotion. You opened it up nicely to insert said emotion....for example. When she was raped you simply said so, short and sweet. When her father made an example of her, you simply said so short and sweet. To me topicals are all about the detail, and while you did have plenty, it just lacked that hint of passion. On the flip side, the entire progression of story was perfect. You opened up with essentially the ending in explaining the "why" before the cause. I liked that.Flow was decent, you had some nice change ups which are often over looked but I enjoyed. There were some weak rhyme schemes. But never really faltered.


Overall this battle is extremely close. I read each multiple times and rather appreciate the highlights greatly. Well I loved the inserted sense of humor I'm torn. Z had a completely different style then I've read in awhile with a fluid, emotional journey that was penned nicely.

Vote zombie.

Two thoroughly enjoyable reads. Look forward to more reads