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Old 04-17-2014, 06:44 PM   #11
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ok, so heres some feed where i didnt leave it before.

this had some really sick lines in it.
some were ok, others were nasty imo. examples...


Alive and on fire,
after survivin' times prior when I was cold as ice
should only have to tell you once
what others had done told you twice

this opening segment was nasty to me.
loved how you transitioned your syllables and it rolled smooth. had a real simple but effective way to grab the readers attention.

doin' some very seldom stuff
like an odd ball child
wonderin' why acceptance sucks

dug this cause i dont care who you are... everyone out there has been that odd ball child and felt unnaccepted before. its not until the oddball child grows up that he realizes acceptance is about confidence.. so in my eyes these days... acceptance is nothing, im confident enough to be like yo -if you dont accept me, the next person will. and hey -if the whole room doesnt accept me, its cause i go to hard for those fagits anyway. (just my two cents on the concept) -well written, again

the rest had a couple spots i enjoyed to. just wanted to throw those out there at you bro. 1
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