Zyg, this was an interesting direction/take on the topic you chose. This was written particularly well, but not exactly at your very best, still really good in comparison to your opponent. I felt your concept was very intriguing but also a bit off. It seems you didn't really round it off as well as you could, either it needed more content or you just couldn't complete such a complex idea. The idea was cool, unique but in accordance with the argument you were making, its ties to abortion just didn't connect well. But major kudos for such a complex idea. Vivid, I really liked the shot of humor/comedy in your piece which really was the strong point. This wasn't written as cleanly as it could have been like other work you've written. Here you seem to sacrifice great mechanics for more story and content, and on that note, I feel you matched Zyg in that regard. The topic you chose and the idea you came up with was interesting and the humor was your driving force. I do have a knock which is how you ended it. It was a pretty crazy finish. Idk what it is, but it just didn't really sit well with me.
This was close because the way you both topped off your pieces was kind of weird. For Viv, it was the seemlessly wild ending with Elvis and for Zyg the connection of a dying violinist to abortion. All in all, I feel Zygs mechanics were cleaner and his idea more intriguing compared to Vivs comedic story, which didn't necessarily deliver enough for me at the end.
MVGT: Zygote. Good job by both competitors.
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