NYC, I read this piece in Open Mic but stumbling upon this match, I was surprised to see this was your piece this week. Either case you know my take on this. It is written with your top notch writing ability, but I wouldn't say this was one of your best written. I really enjoyed the content and countless references. Had some cool phrasing as well. As for relation to a topic, that's where the confusion comes in. From the selected topics this week, I had a hard time trying to figure out which one goes with your piece. I figured it'd be one of the dream related ones or possibly the most powerful man one but that really isn't clearly stated here. Solid job writing though. Witty, it's nice to see you back at it. I immediately was drawn in to your story. The topic you chose seemed to be one of the rare ones that no one else went for this week and you did a great job with it's direction. The storytelling was damn near great, I guess what took a bit from it for me would be the ending, which came a bit unexpected. Aside from that, your details and well written schemes really drove your piece, and you strung everything nicely. While NYC had better content, you had the more complete piece.
This was a no brainer for me. Really I felt while NYC had the more content packed piece, it doesn't seem to tie in with a specific topic and some kind of indication would have helped a bit, though this certainly reads more like a flex for open mic. Witty really impressed me with a great story with the topic choice he went with and wrote it very well.
MVGT: Witty. Good job to both competitors.
__________________
Vetwork, bitches.
|