[Adonis]

Rhetoric- so....where to begin. The opening stanza had a more formatted and complex rhyme scheme, then the rest seemed just was what it was. Some strange rhymes, but as I said,some were complex and understood what you were going for so appreciated not being monotone. This entire story however lacked suspense. I didn't see it coming as the wife, but aside from that major detail I essentially knew what was coming, which is a bummer. I did enjoy the scene you painted initially, honestly throughout the Verse you commanded description, just more so in opening bar scene. To me felt like a group of friends watching football. I did not like how you rhymed afternoon when you painted night in every other instance. Decent verse, solid writing but lacking execution due to lack of suspense. I liked use of topic

Certain- I did not like user of topic much. Not sure why you started talking chess randomly, that muddled the old folks home you drew up. Rhymes were decent, nothing stood out, just simple with few mistakes. All in all, I will be honest, this verse was unimaginative with no flare. It was just a short read to me,not close to you skill level.

Vote rhetoric. Better overall command of writing and topic this week