zygote - the wonderland logic caught me off guard as I lackadaisically disregarded reading the pretext till after the actual body of it - so instead of searching for any underlying comparative analogy I was off into a bleak, blade runner:esque, dystopic future. Which actually made it better when it came down to the "closing argument" of the piece (having to read that amount of pretext is pretty silly imo). Well-crafted if semantically odd with an understated sensibility for smooth rhyming. Good effort.
Vividlyvague - Felt like a "Dear diary..."-entry but with pretext. The narrative kinda of doesn't end up... anywhere, just a weird revelation twist-like writing device. At intervals, I'm down for the occassional piece of fuckery but the main problem here is that your schemes are pretty disconnected and droning.
Overall I think zygote presented the most polished effort, so vote for him(/her)
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