Lars, this was a cool little piece. enjoyed the sort of twist on the end, I kind of expected it for some reason although you did play it well. Rhyme schemes were good enough. Above and look dont rhyme though, atleast where im from lol. Good shit though
Slim, this was alright. Nothing about your approach or any lines really jumped out at me. Your flow was struggling at times making it hard to keep a good pace, even after a couple reads I still couldnt grip it.
V. Bryan
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