adonis - i'm not used to reading topical pieces in this format so i find it a little odd. your flow and your rhyme scheme were nice in this piece, i enjoyed the multis and your placement of them. reading this verse, i found you to be a pretty unique writer based on what i've read. somewhere near the middle of the piece i had predicted the conclusion to this piece, it's got that shutter island feel to it. cool concept here, i feel it could have been made into a real mean topical piece had it been drawn out and executed in a different style. but despite my minor criticisms i enjoyed this piece, good writing.
mike - i found the many movie references to be a tad annoying while reading. i didn't clue in until the end as to why you were doing them, now i understand the purpose of it and think it's a good idea but i wasn't fond of it myself. overall i thought it was decently written, i thought you had some good concepts executed through the piece. i felt the it could have been more entertaining had you utilized more of a rhyme scheme to benefit the flow of the piece.
overall i thought both executed their pieces well enough and made this a pretty good battle, i don't think one person out-wrote the other person here, each had things i liked or didn't like about it, so i'm gonna vote here based on preference of the read.
vote - adonis
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