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Old 04-11-2014, 01:54 PM   #9
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Brian Bryan: You flipped this topic sort of in the reverse of my take, but yours was better as a concept. I know you could have done more to make this a little less procedural, but you wante da short verse. For that, this was creative and built to the twist well. Your rhymes, of course, were fantastic.

MMLP: You went a bit too straight-forward and impersonal with how you approached the topic. This verse left me feeling cold because of how generic your images and concepts were. Also, the rhymes were a bit lagging, particularly compared to your opponent. If you develop your characters and concepts more, you have potential because your diction and composition were good.

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