2 cool easy to read verses. ahhhh. BBs verse was more refined/consistent than his opponents and he managed to pull me in more. Although mmlp, in the middle there was some pretty cool scheming that worked well with the disaster of the scenery you were describing. You should've went more in depth on the whole battle scene since that is where you showed the most skill. BB you wrote a cool lil verse from the perspective of a lady giving birth? Well I dunno, all that matters is that aliens took the baby, and that this story managed to grab my interest despite its brevity.
V/ Brian Bryan
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BIRDHORSE 8-15
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