[big baby]

Both thought out well but I dont the execution on both parts wasnt as suggested or intended. I'm not motivated to write a big vague piece so Ill wrote short and give ample voting to this league.

King - Nice story. It was missing elements though, almost just added in why it was best understood backwards, though I understand your intention. The scenery and imagery was decent and your mechanics were enhanced by your syllable count in each line. It was cool. You had the clue, that lost scroll, that was pretty easy to decipher. Andrews a moron. But, I liked what you had going on. It was almost Zygoteish. Exquisite. Yet, lacking.

Mike - You had a dope thought out part. But I think you lacked in execution as well, I liked where you were going, I also though the ending was subpar. You were kind of on an opposite keel as King, where his started pretty slow but ended strong, and vice versa. Yours didnt end slow, it just ended a bit tacky; but I can see why you made it like that. It was cool, the entire concept. You had sort of a benjamin button thing going on, and that was cool. It was just almost too benajmin button-ish. The war, the son/father thing. Seemed a tad unoriginal, though the underlying theme was great.

I'll have to give it to king, who had a bit of a more clearer, and original take. GJ GUYS.