MW- this was kinda dope. I think the literal translation of the topic was pretty effective here. I wasn't blown away, but this piece, fully equipped with your trademark crispy flow and steady cadence made this less of a drag - on piece. I think having the pictures was a very smart move, as it broke up the ordinary content and revived it in between stanzas. Good job.
Ra.- this was a pretty tight drop on the face of it. This was very elaborate and interesting. I really dug the concept but felt you fell a little short on wording for rhyming. Some parts seemed a little forced and inconsistent with the flow of the thoughts you were trying to get across. For me, that was a little distracting, but it wasn't aweful. Great display overall. Good job.
Both you guys did a good job. I think both of these verses would do great against other competitors, but I feel like something could have done better on both sides to make the verses more enjoyable. My choice comes down to the overall more enjoyable read. MVGT Ra. For going more outside the box and capturing the topic with more imagination.
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