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Old 04-04-2014, 08:56 PM   #9
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the balance of all things that you know to exist, a total eclipse
open the pit, fall asleep and wake up where nobody is
no one exists, not you, me, him, her, or the coma your in
the aroma is rich, enough to sell your soul for a hit
but the coldness is thick, and your clothes have been stripped
the belt you wore doesn't bare the type of gold that it did
frozen and stiff, eyes wide open like your focussed as shit
you bend the rules and hit the wall, but the ropes never give
your gut feels like an ocean of ribs, broke into bits
its over, the bridge you burned down explodes into sticks
and there you are, sitting on a chair where nobody sits

the darkest place conceivable, you know where it is
its nowhere to live, its sick, its your own hair and skin

the first part was ok it felt you shoved in words to make it rhyme having no real meaning to the rest of the line and kind of diluted everything... it def picked up after that and the whole second half was dope especially the bold bar, crazy visual.

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