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Old 04-04-2014, 03:44 AM   #4
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^Completely agree with double V. For what this was, it was totally fine. I think you accomplished what you wanted to here, as I really doubt that you sat down and spent any real amount of time on this piece. You had a bit of a rapid fire delivery in this one. The scheming wasn't as advanced as I've seen from you, which again tells me there wasn't much time put into this one. One piece of advice I could give you would be to maybe step of your vocabulary game a little, all of your word choices were quite basic and bland.
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