This was interesting. A little weird, obviously. Content was quite strange. There were a few parts I didn't understand though:
"Like a battering ram the fangs deep and the juice leaks"
I don't remember a battering ram having fangs, or "juice" per se. Maybe if you mean like the hydraulic fluid is the juice? And I suppose that could be what's leaking. But then it would have to be a malfunctioning battering ram, which you didn't mention.
Sorry Nigma, not trying to be an asshole purposely but that line just stood out because it seemed extremely forced. I actually thought a lot of this verse seemed forced to be honest. I've seen much better work from you, and so have we all, this was clearly just a quick drop for fun...So do what you gotta do, but I will always offer my sincerest feedback regardless. Last line about Dracula period pussy was a little off-putting coming from you. I could have pictured Wise Ways saying that rather than you.
Rhymes, flow and scheming were obviously the star of this verse. Beyond that it was a tad thin. Please see my 2 posts in open mic, I would be curious to see what you think of them. The first one was titled pneumoniacolonoscopymononucleosisississippi, it was in response to daymon blades razor waynes response to your original. Also, I am about to post a new entry. Thanks!
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