Red Glare - interesting twist on a twist (meta) the dream within a dream is literally lame, but the sinners mind wrinkle put a touch of originality on a concept done to death brought back to life and done to death again. so i wont give you too much flack for using it. the flow was cool but sometimes stumbled over itself, and the imagery was actually pretty solid in list form, although youre ultimately going to be held back from writing a fully indepth piece if you stick to that format. and i know it wasnt all in list form but quite a bit of it was.
zenland - your piece also seemed to have the stuttery flow that red glare had. i mean both flows were pretty solid but they were overly ambitious and got caught up inthemselves, trying to incorporate multis and inners eventually worked against you guys, it also sacrificed word choice a bit, clarity is always important, the flow will sort it self out. the fire wordplays toward the end were pretty hot too. ha. anyways. overall i thought you sacrificed word choice for flow a little less to your advantage than red did, and his flow was sturdier in my opinion anyways
v - red glare
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