zyg:
Umm WOW.. That was tight, vocab and structure alone was straight up.. With your advanced intellectual wording and understanding of modern society, the future you predicted was so elegant yet as dark as you would hope with a Poe topic.. Rhythm of the piece mixed with the point you made at the climax made for an amazing read bud.. Nice one..
Frank:
Cool dude, this was dope..1st and 2nd segments you where beautiful with your word play - funny, quirky and punchy.. BUT :) once 3rd stanza hit you kinda mutilated it.. Im soz.. imo it was like you ran out of time but you wanted to stick to the same format, keeping the same revelation.. But it fell apart to me, it was kind like 1/3 as good as the others dragging there verse down.. Still cool drop, but this would have been a lot harder match to vote on..
vote = zygote
Ahh man you killed this ish.. A grade drop :)
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