/v red glare- real nice . the plot turn was definitely entertaining, and rhymes were ridiculously good. can't offer any new criticism . favorite bars..
it's those first few seconds where decisions are taken;
that make chain of events link together, twist with abrasion
we are in situation do not move, sit stiff. keep your lips in incasement
the devil you know, the devil you don't. the encrypted relation
^those lines are pretty fucking deep. worry more about who you dont know than who you do because it all links together .. well. that's what i took from it.
also, enjoyed how you set up the scenery itself.. then went over the finer details, all presented straightforward enough to realize it was somehow scripted before the fake blood part really made me certain. verr nice.
zenland, your piece was very good for not having much time, that i can say with certainty. multis were entertaining and impressive. overall, i took a message of: pray for guidance, but don't expect the right door to be opened for you. got a kick out of this line especially.
Born to breed and once we've bore a seed we're forced to leave
strange how that works.. ~have kids so i can have a grandchild, but get the fuck out of my house after dinner and before dessert~ good piece, looking forward to something more developed when you have a bit more free time.
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