This was pretty good my dude the descriptive process in the beginning...
magnificent....you made me enjoy the joys of Asian cultured parades
after you tried switching the flow up you may have misstepped slightly
you sacrificed the dope visuals for keeping the flow up in the end
it didn't cause much issue to take away from the rest of the verse
you kept a firm hold on the flow and you would have most likely got the dub
I believe you will fare well in the battles to come
you kept a nice balance throughout the piece
keep writing bruh
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